From owner-svn-doc-all@FreeBSD.ORG Fri Jul 12 18:59:00 2013 Return-Path: Delivered-To: svn-doc-all@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.freebsd.org (mx1.freebsd.org [IPv6:2001:1900:2254:206a::19:1]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id F1248D4B; Fri, 12 Jul 2013 18:58:59 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from kaduk@mit.edu) Received: from dmz-mailsec-scanner-5.mit.edu (dmz-mailsec-scanner-5.mit.edu [18.7.68.34]) by mx1.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 724B21912; Fri, 12 Jul 2013 18:58:58 +0000 (UTC) X-AuditID: 12074422-b7ef78e000000935-bc-51e050c029ed Received: from mailhub-auth-2.mit.edu ( [18.7.62.36]) by dmz-mailsec-scanner-5.mit.edu (Symantec Messaging Gateway) with SMTP id F7.D7.02357.0C050E15; Fri, 12 Jul 2013 14:53:52 -0400 (EDT) Received: from outgoing.mit.edu (outgoing-auth-1.mit.edu [18.9.28.11]) by mailhub-auth-2.mit.edu (8.13.8/8.9.2) with ESMTP id r6CIrpxu022964; Fri, 12 Jul 2013 14:53:51 -0400 Received: from multics.mit.edu (system-low-sipb.mit.edu [18.187.2.37]) (authenticated bits=56) (User authenticated as kaduk@ATHENA.MIT.EDU) by outgoing.mit.edu (8.13.8/8.12.4) with ESMTP id r6CIrmx9021767 (version=TLSv1/SSLv3 cipher=DHE-RSA-AES256-SHA bits=256 verify=NOT); Fri, 12 Jul 2013 14:53:50 -0400 Received: (from kaduk@localhost) by multics.mit.edu (8.12.9.20060308) id r6CIrlwI027070; Fri, 12 Jul 2013 14:53:47 -0400 (EDT) Date: Fri, 12 Jul 2013 14:53:47 -0400 (EDT) From: Benjamin Kaduk To: Warren Block Subject: Re: svn commit: r42257 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer In-Reply-To: <201307120321.r6C3Ltph034632@svn.freebsd.org> Message-ID: References: <201307120321.r6C3Ltph034632@svn.freebsd.org> User-Agent: Alpine 1.10 (GSO 962 2008-03-14) MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: TEXT/PLAIN; format=flowed; charset=US-ASCII X-Brightmail-Tracker: H4sIAAAAAAAAA+NgFvrIIsWRmVeSWpSXmKPExsUixG6nonsg4EGgQXeTuMWPj4eYLG4s2s9k sbu/l9ni8vuJLA4sHjM+zWcJYIzisklJzcksSy3St0vgyji8eC1rwRHeim1Pz7E2MP7k6mLk 5JAQMJE4fugCI4QtJnHh3no2EFtIYB+jxITvol2MXED2RkaJ280TWCCcQ0wS0x4ugnIaGCUm vpjPBNLCIqAtMX3WLBYQm01ARWLmm41go0QEVCW+d68Cq2EWiJLYs7SRFcQWFgiRWLdzHpDN wcEpYCWx7kUkSJhXwFGi/90RJogrLCWurHsEVi4qoCOxev8UFogaQYmTM5+wQIy0lPi39hfr BEbBWUhSs5CkFjAyrWKUTcmt0s1NzMwpTk3WLU5OzMtLLdI11cvNLNFLTSndxAgOWRelHYw/ DyodYhTgYFTi4X0h9CBQiDWxrLgy9xCjJAeTkiivnD9QiC8pP6UyI7E4I76oNCe1+BCjBAez kgjvPkegHG9KYmVValE+TEqag0VJnPfZ07OBQgLpiSWp2ampBalFMFkZDg4lCd4PIEMFi1LT UyvSMnNKENJMHJwgw3mAhi8AqeEtLkjMLc5Mh8ifYlSUEudV8gNKCIAkMkrz4HphKeUVozjQ K8K8msAEI8QDTEdw3a+ABjMBDb696j7I4JJEhJRUA+OswGWBy/yYs4oCnvDee3J5+yp/jaB9 Ys9ni677ssVvp531t86LrJVpPj0xqo+2b9sjczOza+XNkC1bswweWV7rV0nSXDJHk8tg9t1z d+cueNNfEVBq/OqE0IkWwQXHvqd5iHV4ObywO1j7xpdH3qmtcHbZ4dvZkRyH7gQkGnAZfnnO GuWQUK7EUpyRaKjFXFScCACsTsdFBAMAAA== Cc: svn-doc-head@freebsd.org, svn-doc-all@freebsd.org, doc-committers@freebsd.org X-BeenThere: svn-doc-all@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.14 Precedence: list List-Id: "SVN commit messages for the entire doc trees \(except for " user" , " projects" , and " translations" \)" List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Fri, 12 Jul 2013 18:59:00 -0000 On Fri, 12 Jul 2013, Warren Block wrote: > Author: wblock > Date: Fri Jul 12 03:21:55 2013 > New Revision: 42257 > URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/42257 > > Log: > Edit for clarity and style. Try to persuade the hippo and the pogo stick > that they are not good for each other. > > Modified: > head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml > > Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml > ============================================================================== > --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml Fri Jul 12 02:59:50 2013 (r42256) > +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml Fri Jul 12 03:21:55 2013 (r42257) > @@ -100,42 +100,40 @@ > - Obviously, if you are going to use markup you need to define > - what your markup means, and how it should be interpreted. You > - will need a markup language that you can follow when marking up > - your documents. > + Markup languages define what > + what the markup means and how it should be interpreted. What what?! > @@ -680,48 +665,45 @@ example.xml:5: element head: validity er > - Look at the contents of > + Examine the contents of > /usr/local/share/xml/dtd/xhtml/catalog.xml. > - This is the catalog file for the XHTML DTDs that will have > - been installed as part of the + This is the catalog file for the XHTML DTDs that was s/was/were/ -Ben > + installed as part of the role="package">textproc/docproj port. > >