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Subject: Re: New Handbook Section for Review - graid3
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On Tue, 31 Jan 2012, Benedict Reuschling wrote:

> +      <note>
> +	<para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from
> +	  <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, such configuration
> +	  is not common and is not advised.  As such, this section
> +	  does not provide description of how to accomplish such
> +	  configuration.</para>
> +      </note>
>
> How about reducing the "such" word count in the last sentence? How about
> "... of how to accomplish this kind of configuration." or "... this type
> of configuration." ?

I suggested

       <para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from a
         <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, such a configuration
         is not common and is not advised.  As such, this section
         does not describe how to accomplish that
         configuration.</para>

That still could be better.

       <para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from a
         <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, that configuration
         is uncommon and not advised.  As such, this section
         does not describe how to accomplish it.</para>

Actually, the last sentence is kind of a "this page intentionally left 
blank":

       <para>While it is theoretically possible to boot from a
         <acronym>RAID</acronym>3 array on &os;, that configuration
         is uncommon and not advised.</para>