Date: Wed, 3 Dec 2008 19:03:00 -0500 From: Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org> To: Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> Cc: pgj@FreeBSD.org, freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook Message-ID: <20081203190300.550255b5.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <4936F963.7040201@gmail.com> References: <493155ED.8020004@FreeBSD.org> <49316309.1050407@gmail.com> <49330A66.8040801@FreeBSD.org> <20081201091730.0ef555fa.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> <49359784.504@FreeBSD.org> <49359EA1.3080600@gmail.com> <4936E15E.8000804@FreeBSD.org> <4936F963.7040201@gmail.com>
next in thread | previous in thread | raw e-mail | index | archive | help
On Wed, 03 Dec 2008 23:25:55 +0200 Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> wrote: > Gabor PALI wrote: > > Manolis Kiagias wrote: > > > >> I like the improvements too :) > >> If I were to make a few changes (at the edge of these being doc-bikesheds): > >> > > > > Absolutely not, it IS suggested by the FDP Primer [1]: > > > > ``Avoid redundant phrases > > > > Try not to use redundant phrases. In particular, "the command", "the > > file", and "man command" are probably redundant.'' > > > > > > Hopefully, I will reach this section of the FDP Primer in the Hungarian > > translation soon :) Thanks for the comment! > > > > > > I fixed the parts in question, so you can proof-check the results here: > > > > (in HTML:) > > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH > > > > (in unified diff format:) > > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/splash.screen.section.patch.diff > > > > > > Regards, > > :g > > > > [1] http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en/books/fdp-primer/writing-style.html > > > > > Looks fine to me! > I also tested the procedure on my Aspire One. Got the "may the source be > with you" splash up in no time at all ;) > Yes, this looks pretty good over here too. Thanks! -- Tom Rhodes
Want to link to this message? Use this URL: <https://mail-archive.FreeBSD.org/cgi/mid.cgi?20081203190300.550255b5.trhodes>