Date: Mon, 24 Nov 2008 21:34:28 +0200 From: Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> To: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@freebsd.org> Cc: gabor@kovesdan.org, Tom Rhodes <trhodes@freebsd.org>, doc@freebsd.org, pgj@freebsd.org Subject: Re: A patch for the 'geom' chapter Message-ID: <492B01C4.6090707@gmail.com> In-Reply-To: <87abbp3q5o.fsf@kobe.laptop> References: <492AE607.4020208@gmail.com> <20081124135107.06a8af26.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> <87abbp3q5o.fsf@kobe.laptop>
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Giorgos Keramidas wrote: > On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 13:51:07 -0500, Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org> wrote: > >> On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:36:07 +0200 >> Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> wrote: >> >>> http://people.freebsd.org/~manolis/geom.txt >>> > > >> This looks pretty good actually. I would probably change the >> following: >> >> + <example> >> + <title>Labeling Your Boot Disk's Partitions</title> >> >> to: >> >> <title>Labeling Partitions on the Boot Disk</title> >> >> And there are a lot of "You" references. I've tried to write this >> without invoking the user as much as possible and may make reading the >> entire chapter difficult. I would prefer we not talk to the user >> though. >> > > I am not sure if I will have the time to read the full patch tonight, > but Tom is quite right about avoiding "you" when possible. > > Thanks. I will try to rephrase most parts into passive voice where possible. I guess I am somewhat influenced by the Greek translations, where sometimes passive voice sounds unnatural ;) Cheers, manolis
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