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Subject: Anyone up for a little triage on http://www.freebsd.org/about.html?
Date: Fri, 12 Jul 1996 03:09:49 -0700
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From: "Jordan K. Hubbard" <jkh@time.cdrom.com>
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I don't know about you folks, but that text's been looking a little
shopworn to me lately.  The problem is that everything I've attempted
to write in replacement has swung wildly from dry techiespeak to sheer
marketing fluff and I've simply thrown my hands up on getting this one
right.  I can't quite find the correct balance, but I'm sure I'd know
it if I saw it! :-)  Any volunteers?

The overall style of our current version isn't so bad so much as is
the content - I don't think that trumpeting "PRE-EMPTIVE
MULTITASKING!" is, for example, quite as effective as citing some more
FreeBSD specific feature (e.g. focus on its areas of strength in
comparsison to other UN*Xen, not only DOS/Windows as the current one
does).

Anyway, 2.1.5 is coming out soon and everybody's going to be *looking*
at the one we have now.  Urgh!  Ack!  Help! :)

					Jordan