From owner-freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.ORG Fri Dec 10 17:15:09 2010 Return-Path: Delivered-To: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Received: from mx1.freebsd.org (mx1.freebsd.org [IPv6:2001:4f8:fff6::34]) by hub.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id 513671065670 for ; Fri, 10 Dec 2010 17:15:09 +0000 (UTC) (envelope-from glen.j.barber@gmail.com) Received: from mail-qw0-f54.google.com (mail-qw0-f54.google.com [209.85.216.54]) by mx1.freebsd.org (Postfix) with ESMTP id F0F408FC14 for ; Fri, 10 Dec 2010 17:15:08 +0000 (UTC) Received: by qwj9 with SMTP id 9so4045473qwj.13 for ; Fri, 10 Dec 2010 09:15:08 -0800 (PST) DKIM-Signature: v=1; a=rsa-sha256; c=relaxed/relaxed; d=gmail.com; s=gamma; h=domainkey-signature:received:received:message-id:date:from :user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject:references:in-reply-to :x-enigmail-version:content-type:content-transfer-encoding; bh=U72cRmEFo5ew/N7aSxob/8wbe7Cw6RtCbNUPkPv6wTg=; b=K5g2SKPe3aiVdU3lpqbY01TJNSFF/mG8VkObgok/jYq7RvQLPXf4/pH4uJBuDLD5mU 719db5MhTsneuJpSSg/2Z55CmNWBcGC9Oxi9e9anwnerWu4bQopQRT0nOigGvcLrDgjZ q3TeyI6k4lgY0Ma40VbhrPLXildYqtjgDwCQA= DomainKey-Signature: a=rsa-sha1; c=nofws; d=gmail.com; s=gamma; h=message-id:date:from:user-agent:mime-version:to:cc:subject :references:in-reply-to:x-enigmail-version:content-type :content-transfer-encoding; b=o7RhbJMeVTqBpABy/TLRIRpmY/ptBv9BgYtLouRQSu0RylzupW0LpGQr6DJOkTxmLM 0w5EBIg4a0r8otNKTE+QmuonsVz8olBEl09IzUpK+qCVafsWjxnlgP4SY9IO+ek4F3el TJkrh7vobJfVMcsr0KwPs5xLoqtk6BIwA724Y= Received: by 10.224.19.213 with SMTP id c21mr923877qab.326.1292001308074; Fri, 10 Dec 2010 09:15:08 -0800 (PST) Received: from schism.local (173-161-130-225-Philadelphia.hfc.comcastbusiness.net [173.161.130.225]) by mx.google.com with ESMTPS id t17sm2103091qcp.26.2010.12.10.09.15.06 (version=SSLv3 cipher=RC4-MD5); Fri, 10 Dec 2010 09:15:06 -0800 (PST) Message-ID: <4D026019.20408@gmail.com> Date: Fri, 10 Dec 2010 12:15:05 -0500 From: Glen Barber User-Agent: Mozilla/5.0 (Macintosh; U; Intel Mac OS X 10.6; en-US; rv:1.9.2.12) Gecko/20101027 Thunderbird/3.1.6 MIME-Version: 1.0 To: Ryusuke SUZUKI References: <20101209.223154.193764232.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> <4D00E2C8.8020206@gmail.com> <20101211.011833.193776160.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> In-Reply-To: <20101211.011833.193776160.ryusuke@jp.FreeBSD.org> X-Enigmail-Version: 1.1.1 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=ISO-8859-1 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Cc: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: newbies page (ppp) X-BeenThere: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org X-Mailman-Version: 2.1.5 Precedence: list List-Id: Documentation project List-Unsubscribe: , List-Archive: List-Post: List-Help: List-Subscribe: , X-List-Received-Date: Fri, 10 Dec 2010 17:15:09 -0000 On 12/10/10 11:18 AM, Ryusuke SUZUKI wrote: > > ryusuke> How about the following patch? > ryusuke> > ryusuke> diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml > > ryusuke> snip... > > ryusuke> +

  • There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp. > ryusuke> + You might start with at least those parts of the > > glen> I think with this rewording, "at least" can be removed. > > Thanks. "at leaset" is removed and clarify "those parts" as following, > > diff -u -r1.58 newbies.sgml > --- newbies.sgml 9 Aug 2009 12:58:45 -0000 1.58 > +++ newbies.sgml 9 Dec 2010 15:29:53 -0000 > @@ -70,11 +70,10 @@ > beginners. You do not have to know much about anything to enjoy > this one.

    • > > -

  • The first thing many people need to set up is ppp, and there is > - a lot of documentation to help. You might start with at least those > - parts of the > - Handbook > - that are relevant to your needs, and explore the > +

  • There is a lot of documentation to help for setting up ppp. > + You might start with the + href="&url.books;/handbook/ppp-and-slip.html">PPP and SLIP > + chapter of the FreeBSD Handbook that are relevant to your needs, and explore the Not to sound pedantic, but maybe 's/FreeBSD/&os;/' too? :) Best regards, -- Glen Barber