Date: Fri, 19 Nov 2004 09:02:45 +0100 From: Joel Dahl <joel@automatvapen.se> To: Murray Stokely <murray@freebsd.org> Cc: freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: docs/70583: [PATCH] Update freebsd-glossary Message-ID: <1100851365.569.5.camel@dude.automatvapen.se> In-Reply-To: <20041117222732.GA96501@hub.freebsd.org> References: <200408201640.i7KGePeA034000@freefall.freebsd.org> <20041117222732.GA96501@hub.freebsd.org>
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On Wed, 2004-11-17 at 22:27 +0000, Murray Stokely wrote: > Hi Joel, thanks for the submissions. I've noticed that many of your > submissions don't use a serial comma so they stick out when compared > with the rest of our documentation set. Ok, thanks. > > > <glossterm>Unix File System Version 2</glossterm> > > <acronym>UFS2</acronym> > > <glossdef> > > - <para></para> > > + <para>An extension to <acronym>UFS1</acronym>, introduced in > > + &os; 5-CURRENT. <acronym>UFS2</acronym> adds 64 bit block > > + pointers (breaking the 1T barrier), support for extended file > > + storage, and a few other things. > > extended file attributes, and other enhancements. ? Yes, this description is weak. Feel free to replace "a few other things" to something better. > > + </para> > > </glossdef> > > </glossdiv> > > @@ -1762,7 +1775,10 @@ > > <glossterm>Virtual Private Network</glossterm> > > <acronym>VPN</acronym> > > <glossdef> > > - <para></para> > > + <para>A way to use a public telecommunication > > + infrastructure, such as the Internet, to provide remote > > + users with a secure connection to their organizations > > organization's ? "to provide users with a secure connection to a remote network" maybe? -- Joel
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