Date: Fri, 15 Jul 2005 16:41:14 +0200 From: Tilman Linneweh <arved@arved.at> To: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@freebsd.org> Cc: freebsd-doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: Small diff to ipv6 chapter Message-ID: <20050715144114.GH19236@arved.at> In-Reply-To: <20050714185739.GA1191@beatrix.daedalusnetworks.priv> References: <20050714170633.GE19236@arved.at> <20050714185739.GA1191@beatrix.daedalusnetworks.priv>
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--9zSXsLTf0vkW971A Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Disposition: inline Hello Giorgos, Thanks for the review here is an updated patch, which should contain your suggestions plus some additions. * Giorgos Keramidas [2005-07-14 20:57]: > When it makes sense, I prefer seeing commits that change <ulink> > elements like this: > > <ulink url="http://example.net/">example.net</ulink>; > > to this: > > <ulink url="http://example.net/"></ulink>; > > This saves us typing, it's more difficult to get wrong (less duplication > of text) and renders better in non-hypertext versions of the docs, where > the link URL is not ``lost''. [..] regards tilman --9zSXsLTf0vkW971A Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Disposition: attachment; filename=patch-ipv6 Index: chapter.sgml =================================================================== RCS file: /home/dcvs/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/advanced-networking/chapter.sgml,v retrieving revision 1.366 diff -u -u -r1.366 chapter.sgml --- chapter.sgml 14 Jul 2005 21:27:31 -0000 1.366 +++ chapter.sgml 15 Jul 2005 14:35:34 -0000 @@ -2308,8 +2308,8 @@ <primary>Etherboot</primary> </indexterm> - <para><ulink url="http://etherboot.sourceforge.net">Etherboot's Web - site</ulink> contains + <para>Etherboot's Web site <ulink + url="http://etherboot.sourceforge.net/"></ulink>; contains <ulink url="http://etherboot.sourceforge.net/doc/html/userman/t1.html">; extensive documentation</ulink> mainly intended for Linux systems, but nonetheless containing useful information. The @@ -3648,15 +3648,16 @@ <itemizedlist> <listitem> - <para>IPv6 overview at <ulink url="http://playground.sun.com/pub/ipng/html/ipng-main.html">playground.sun.com</ulink></para>; + <para>IPv6 overview at playground.sun.com <ulink + url="http://playground.sun.com/pub/ipng/html/ipng-main.html"></ulink></para>; </listitem> <listitem> - <para><ulink url="http://www.kame.net">KAME.net</ulink></para>; + <para>KAME.net <ulink url="http://www.kame.net/"></ulink></para>; </listitem> <listitem> - <para><ulink url="http://www.6bone.net">6bone.net</ulink></para>; + <para>6bone.net <ulink url="http://www.6bone.net/"></ulink></para>; </listitem> </itemizedlist> @@ -3825,7 +3826,7 @@ </listitem> <listitem> - <para>Tunnel via 6-to-4 (<ulink + <para>Tunnel via the 6-to-4 tunnel interface &man.stf.4; (<ulink url="http://www.ietf.org/rfc/rfc3068.txt">RFC3068</ulink>)</para>; </listitem> @@ -3840,7 +3841,7 @@ <para>First take a look at the <ulink url="http://www.6bone.net/">6bone</ulink>; site and find a 6bone connection nearest to you. Write to the responsible person and with a little bit of luck you will be given instructions on how to set up your connection. Usually this - involves setting up a GRE (gif) tunnel.</para> + involves setting up an IP tunnel.</para> <para>Here is a typical example on setting up a &man.gif.4; tunnel:</para> @@ -3877,8 +3878,8 @@ 6 3ffe:1800:0:3:290:27ff:fe14:cdee 394.712 ms 397.19 ms 394.102 ms</screen> <para>This output will differ from machine to machine. By now you should be - able to reach the IPv6 site <ulink url="http://www.kame.net">www.kame.net</ulink>; - and see the dancing tortoise — that is if you have a IPv6 enabled browser such as + able to reach the IPv6 site <ulink url="http://www.kame.net/"></ulink>; + and see the dancing tortoise — that is if you have an IPv6 enabled browser such as <filename role="package">www/mozilla</filename>, <application>Konqueror</application>, which is part of <filename role="package">x11/kdebase3</filename>, or <filename role="package">www/epiphany</filename>.</para> @@ -3888,8 +3889,8 @@ <sect2> <title>DNS in the IPv6 World</title> - <para>There used to be two types of DNS records for IPv6. The IETF - has declared A6 records obsolete. AAAA records are the standard + <para>There used to be two types of DNS records for IPv6: A6 and AAAA. The + IETF has declared A6 records obsolete. AAAA records are the standard now.</para> <para>Using AAAA records is straightforward. Assign your hostname to the new @@ -3963,7 +3964,7 @@ </sect3> <sect3> - <title>IPv6 Tunnel Settings</title> + <title>IPv6 Router Settings</title> <para>If the server is to route IPv6 between the rest of your network and the world, the following <filename>/etc/rc.conf</filename> @@ -3998,15 +3999,15 @@ :addrs#1:addr="2001:471:1f11:246::":prefixlen#64:tc=ether:</programlisting> <para>Replace <devicename>fxp0</devicename> with the interface you - are going to be using.</para> - - <para>Next, replace <hostid role="ip6addr">2001:471:1f11:246::</hostid> - with the prefix of your allocation.</para> - - <para>If you are dedicated a <hostid role="netmask">/64</hostid> subnet + are going to be using. Next, replace <hostid role="ip6addr"> + 2001:471:1f11:246::</hostid> with the prefix of your allocation. + If you are dedicated a <hostid role="netmask">/64</hostid> subnet you will not need to change anything else. Otherwise, you will need to change the <literal>prefixlen#</literal> to the correct value.</para> + <para>The manual page &man.rtadvd.conf.5; describes the syntax of this + configuration file.</para> + </sect2> </sect1> --9zSXsLTf0vkW971A--
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