Date: Sat, 27 Aug 2005 12:26:22 -0700 From: garys@opusnet.com (Gary W. Swearingen) To: Julien Gabel <jpeg@thilelli.net> Cc: docs@freebsd.org Subject: Re: docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook. Message-ID: <nzd5nzmba9.5nz@mail.opusnet.com> In-Reply-To: <20050827161157.0DA1D73027@titeuf.thilelli.net> (Julien Gabel's message of "Sat, 27 Aug 2005 18:11:57 %2B0200 (CEST)") References: <20050827161157.0DA1D73027@titeuf.thilelli.net>
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Julien Gabel <jpeg@thilelli.net> writes: > <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly > - created disk stripe.</para> > + created disk stripe:</para> It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be redundant in sentences that ends with ":". In decreasing order of verbosity: The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe. This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe: To manually mount a newly created disk stripe: And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created".
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