Date: Sat, 27 Aug 2005 22:46:53 +0200 (CEST) From: "Julien Gabel" <jpeg@thilelli.net> To: "Gary W. Swearingen" <garys@opusnet.com> Cc: docs@freebsd.org Subject: Re: docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the GEOM (geom-striping) chapter of the Handbook. Message-ID: <61707.192.168.1.20.1125175613.squirrel@webmail.thilelli.net> In-Reply-To: <nzd5nzmba9.5nz@mail.opusnet.com> References: <20050827161157.0DA1D73027@titeuf.thilelli.net> <nzd5nzmba9.5nz@mail.opusnet.com>
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>> <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly >> - created disk stripe.</para> >> + created disk stripe:</para> > It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be > redundant in sentences that ends with ":". Agreed. > In decreasing order of verbosity: > > The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created > disk stripe. > > This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe: > > To manually mount a newly created disk stripe: This one may be better i think, since it is more concise. > And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created". Don't have a preference about this one. -- -jpeg.
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