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Date:      Fri, 12 Jul 2013 16:02:55 -0600 (MDT)
From:      Warren Block <wblock@wonkity.com>
To:        Benjamin Kaduk <kaduk@MIT.EDU>
Cc:        svn-doc-head@freebsd.org, svn-doc-all@freebsd.org, doc-committers@freebsd.org, Warren Block <wblock@freebsd.org>
Subject:   Re: svn commit: r42257 - head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer
Message-ID:  <alpine.BSF.2.00.1307121601470.3231@wonkity.com>
In-Reply-To: <alpine.GSO.1.10.1307121441070.26275@multics.mit.edu>
References:  <201307120321.r6C3Ltph034632@svn.freebsd.org> <alpine.GSO.1.10.1307121441070.26275@multics.mit.edu>

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On Fri, 12 Jul 2013, Benjamin Kaduk wrote:

> On Fri, 12 Jul 2013, Warren Block wrote:
>
>> Author: wblock
>> Date: Fri Jul 12 03:21:55 2013
>> New Revision: 42257
>> URL: http://svnweb.freebsd.org/changeset/doc/42257
>> 
>> Log:
>>  Edit for clarity and style.  Try to persuade the hippo and the pogo stick
>>  that they are not good for each other.
>> 
>> Modified:
>>  head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml
>> 
>> Modified: head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml
>> ==============================================================================
>> --- head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml	Fri 
>> Jul 12 02:59:50 2013	(r42256)
>> +++ head/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/fdp-primer/xml-primer/chapter.xml	Fri 
>> Jul 12 03:21:55 2013	(r42257)
>> @@ -100,42 +100,40 @@
>> -    <para>Obviously, if you are going to use markup you need to define
>> -      what your markup means, and how it should be interpreted.  You
>> -      will need a markup language that you can follow when marking up
>> -      your documents.</para>
>> +    <para>Markup languages define what
>> +      what the markup means and how it should be interpreted.</para>
>
> What what?!

Fixed in a later commit.  If only there were a program that could be run 
to detect problems like that.

>> @@ -680,48 +665,45 @@ example.xml:5: element head: validity er
>> -	<para>Look at the contents of
>> +	<para>Examine the contents of
>> 	  <filename>/usr/local/share/xml/dtd/xhtml/catalog.xml</filename>.
>> -	  This is the catalog file for the XHTML DTDs that will have
>> -	  been installed as part of the <filename
>> +	  This is the catalog file for the <acronym>XHTML</acronym> 
>> <acronym>DTD</acronym>s that was
>
> s/was/were/

Oops, fixed.  Thanks!



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