Date: Wed, 03 Dec 2008 23:25:55 +0200 From: Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> To: Gabor PALI <pgj@FreeBSD.org> Cc: Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org>, freebsd-doc@FreeBSD.org Subject: Re: RFR: A "Boot Time Splash Screens" Section to the Handbook Message-ID: <4936F963.7040201@gmail.com> In-Reply-To: <4936E15E.8000804@FreeBSD.org> References: <493155ED.8020004@FreeBSD.org> <49316309.1050407@gmail.com> <49330A66.8040801@FreeBSD.org> <20081201091730.0ef555fa.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> <49359784.504@FreeBSD.org> <49359EA1.3080600@gmail.com> <4936E15E.8000804@FreeBSD.org>
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Gabor PALI wrote: > Manolis Kiagias wrote: > >> I like the improvements too :) >> If I were to make a few changes (at the edge of these being doc-bikesheds): >> > > Absolutely not, it IS suggested by the FDP Primer [1]: > > ``Avoid redundant phrases > > Try not to use redundant phrases. In particular, "the command", "the > file", and "man command" are probably redundant.'' > > > Hopefully, I will reach this section of the FDP Primer in the Hungarian > translation soon :) Thanks for the comment! > > > I fixed the parts in question, so you can proof-check the results here: > > (in HTML:) > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/html/boot-blocks.html#BOOT-SPLASH > > (in unified diff format:) > http://people.freebsd.org/~pgj/patches/2008/12/03/splash.screen.section.patch.diff > > > Regards, > :g > > [1] http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en/books/fdp-primer/writing-style.html > > Looks fine to me! I also tested the procedure on my Aspire One. Got the "may the source be with you" splash up in no time at all ;)
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