Date: Mon, 24 Nov 2008 21:00:35 +0200 From: Giorgos Keramidas <keramida@freebsd.org> To: Tom Rhodes <trhodes@freebsd.org> Cc: gabor@kovesdan.org, pgj@freebsd.org, doc@freebsd.org Subject: Re: A patch for the 'geom' chapter Message-ID: <87abbp3q5o.fsf@kobe.laptop> In-Reply-To: <20081124135107.06a8af26.trhodes@FreeBSD.org> (Tom Rhodes's message of "Mon, 24 Nov 2008 13:51:07 -0500") References: <492AE607.4020208@gmail.com> <20081124135107.06a8af26.trhodes@FreeBSD.org>
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On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 13:51:07 -0500, Tom Rhodes <trhodes@FreeBSD.org> wrote: > On Mon, 24 Nov 2008 19:36:07 +0200 > Manolis Kiagias <sonic2000gr@gmail.com> wrote: >> http://people.freebsd.org/~manolis/geom.txt > This looks pretty good actually. I would probably change the > following: > > + <example> > + <title>Labeling Your Boot Disk's Partitions</title> > > to: > > <title>Labeling Partitions on the Boot Disk</title> > > And there are a lot of "You" references. I've tried to write this > without invoking the user as much as possible and may make reading the > entire chapter difficult. I would prefer we not talk to the user > though. I am not sure if I will have the time to read the full patch tonight, but Tom is quite right about avoiding "you" when possible.
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